In the middle of the Arctic Ocean, there is an iceberg. On that iceberg lives a polar bear. His name is Fraser. One day, Fraser was feeling really hungry. As a result of his hunger he jumped of his iceberg and went for a swim, in search of a fat, young seal.
After ten minutes of swimming he smelt something. It was a familiar smell to Fraser, suddenly he recognised the smell. It was seal. Based on the strength of the smell, Fraser estimated that the seal
was only a few hundred metres away. Fraser swam as fast as he could.
The seal was close.
Kia ora Oliver!
This is a story well told, and leaves the audience in anticipation, just waiting to see what will happen next to both the seal and the polar bear! I do like some of the vocabulary that you have used – words such as ‘familiar’ and ‘recognised’.
Remember to check all of your writing carefully though, so that you do spell words such as OFF , correctly in your final presentation.
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